#1 REVISION

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Okay. Maybe you’ve written a fable of about 500 words, one that you might even have typed and fits single-spaced on a single page. Or maybe you did something else. Maybe you followed the rules, or maybe you didn’t. Whatever. This is not a test of your ability to follow instructions.

It’s time to try doing something “weird” to the story. Or not. Your choice.

  • Prepare to rewrite. If you typed it, save the version you have and retype it. (If it’s short, it’s actually quicker to retype than to do a find/change.) Just keep both versions.
  • If you wrote in past tense, change the verb tense throughout your story to present tense. “He ran home” becomes “He runs home.” The story is told as it’s happening. If you already chose present tense, change it to past tense. This change will alter every single sentence. Often, more than the verb has to change to make the sentence work. But verbs are actually the least of your problem.
  • You were supposed to write in third person with no I or we other than perhaps in dialogue. Take a breath. Trust me, it’s doable. Change the point of view to first person observer-narrator. Even if you ignored the rule and wrote in first person, choose another character to tell the story or make one up a new character. Remember my Bird story I published yesterday? It’s third person/past tense. I need an observer to tell my story. I might have to invent a new character, someone watching the action and telling about it in real time. The observer tells a story about your main character.
  • Add dialogue. Yeah, really.

BEFORE: In a place people think they know and not so long ago, a small bird with a black head, a grayish back, and white flight feathers picked at the ground. By nature she was a cautious person. She was busy looking for seed and finding it. She pecked at small red ants and swallowed them too. Some might have named her genus and species. She had no such names for herself. She was Bird. Everything was simple in her world. …

AFTER: All the littler People think they know this place, but they really don’t. I know it because I have always lived here and I see everything. That bird there—mindless, eating seeds on the ground, ants, heaven knows what. She takes off every time the winds shifts, everytime anything stirs and she’s off. It must be a boring life. That bird is unprepared minute by minute, but she gets by. She’s a simple creature.

“Bird!” I say, and off she flies. I want to warn her about Rat. Does she even see him?

When she comes back, I try again: “Bird! It’s just me, Tree!”

This goes on and on—I greet her, she flies away—until she finally looks before she leaps into my branches. “Oh, hi,” she says. “What did I do?” And she begins apologizing for pooping on my branch last night

  • Your story might get longer because you have to add characters talking to one another or because it starts in a different place. The plot might change. It might get funnier or sadder or find a new ending. The moral of your story might even change. All of that is fine. Let the changes happen!

When you are done messing about, have a look at both versions. Which one do you like better? What can you borrow from one to make the other better. In other words: you are on your own for draft three.

If you want to, you could post your fable (any version) as a comment. Or not. Whatever. I will post my revision at the weekend. I’m not sure I want my observer-narrator to be a tree.

NEST WEEK: [and mostly from now on] a nonfiction assignment!

 

 

The Mentalist: Reward and Routine

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Getting through a national crisis might be a little crazy like a police consultant following instinct and impression or it might be orderly like completing a knitted pair of socks. Maybe it’s a little of both. I have one sock of a pair in the works, knit top down. The leg part is done, the heel flap, and the heel is turned. I also have five book-length projects I could be working on just now, at least 350k words that need work. I could be working on revising those books, or I could be painting the hallway even though there is snow on the hills behind my house. (Because the paint is zero-VOC and I have brushes and a roller ready to go.) I could scrub dust from the baseboards or the molding of the bathroom door. I could sort my books or bake sweet rolls. I still have plenty of flour, five eggs, and sis sticks of butter. I could bake something. My husband says I should be doing our taxes. And I have the time. 

I am not going anywhere anytime soon.

Instead, I want to watch season 6 of The Mentalist. Continue reading

NO BAD THINGS

I found a list on the Tor website of books in which nothing bad happens, not merely a good ending, but nothing bad before it gets there. Adult books too. It’s Tor so mostly fantasy/SF, but read the comments because the list grows . . .

ASSIGNMENT #1: Fable

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Today, and at least for the following four Mondays, I will post a writing assignment. Then later in the week, a weird revision strategy.

Just for fun, write a fable . . . We will follow the conventions (rules) of a fable, at least at the beginning. They are relatively easy rules. If you have a computer and prefer to type, you may use it or write it out long hand. The assignment is short—that’s one of the rules. Continue reading

Over the Rainbow

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Our older son was in Band in high school (sax) and our younger (first tenor) began Choir in middle school. I attended State competitions for both Band and Choir, but one year the Seaside High School choir director, Michelle Starke, directed a song from the middle of an auditorium with students all around the sides of the vast space. That meant the choir had to pay absolute attention to their director because sound does not travel instantly. To keep their voices together required discipline.

A California high school choir sang a capella from home. If you haven’t already seen it, you need to listen and watch this.

“School closures throughout the nation have halted highly-anticipated campus events and activities with hundreds of thousands of students practicing social distancing at home. While the annual Chino Valley Unified School District (CVUSD) Choral Festival—originally scheduled for Wednesday, March 18—has been cancelled, our Chino Hills HS Chamber Singers demonstrated resilience by recording their individual a cappella portion of Over the Rainbow in their separate homes, and through technology were able to appear together as a family again. Their harmonious performance was shared online for the CVUSD community with the goal of spreading hope and cheer during this difficult time.”

And from novelist Nicola Griffith: “No one knows where we’re heading or what it’ll be like when we get there. So be kind. Be patient. Be cheerful. Don’t let yourself be ruled by fear. Choose love and compassion. Forgive yourself and others. Stay connected to others. Take your joy where you can. Try to assume good intent. If you feel bad, be kind to yourself. And remember that some people out there will be in a bad way, mentally, physically, emotionally, and financially. If you can spare anything extra—money, kindness, patience, a mask, the benefit of the doubt, a moment to listen—you might brighten one small corner of the world. Do your best to be a fine human being. And we might all get through this.”

SUCCESS

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“A successful shelter in place means nothing happens.”

This Chicago doctor spoke the words of reassurance I’ve been waiting for. If that link doesn’t give you the story and video, try this one. You might feel better. I do.

In the mean time, I am following good advice. We have time to accomplish goals.  Continue reading

GOOD ADVICE

from The Atlantic:

The people who still aren’t listening—and how to deal with them

Wash your hands. Don’t touch your face. Don’t go to the bar. Don’t go anywhere at all. Wash your hands again.

It’s a lot. We’re currently participating in “the world’s largest natural experiment in behavior change.” And, as last weekend’s partying showed, some people just aren’t willing to commit, whether out of selfishness or ignorance.

For the loved ones of those refusing to comply, this creates a moral and practical quandary: How do you convince a particularly stubborn relative to take the coronavirus pandemic seriously?

For starters, two Wharton psychologists, Adam Grant and Reb Rebele, argue that moral responsibility can be a powerful motivator.

Also here to help is our staff writer Joe Pinsker, who asked a few experts to weigh in. They suggested the following:

  • (Gently) remind people it’s not all about them.

  • Avoid numbers; tell stories.

  • Don’t just ask people not to do something—ask them to do something else.

  • Don’t forget to be nice.

For further explanation—and even a prewritten script you can use on that difficult relative—read Joe’s comprehensive guide.


22 March 2020

A top World Health Organization official warned Sunday that lockdowns are ineffective without programs to identify and isolate the sick and anyone they have contacted, otherwise when they’re lifted, ”the danger is the disease will jump back up.”

How To Generate Content

This is such excellent advice I decided to figure out how to “reblog.” (HINT: Allison K. Williams’ Brevity posts are always worthwhile.) Perhaps I will even try to take this good advice. I keep thinking this might be the time to share my best writing prompts, especially since Willamette Writers has postponed events (well, of course they have) so I don’t know when my presentation will take place.

Allison K Williams's avatarThe Brevity Blog

“Start a blog!” agents say. “Write a newsletter!” announce publishers. “You’ll build readership and be more attractive to agents and publishers!”

But what the heck do you put in it? Hey, I got rejected again by the same magazine?

Yes.

Absolutely.

(I do.)

The daily grind of your writing life is indeed fodder for bulletins every week or two. More than once a week gets annoying; less than once a month and people forget who you are and unsubscribe. Try to share your work the same time and day, so that people have a subconscious expectation of reading you, say, Tuesday mornings.

I have to write something every week? What if it’s not good? What if it’s not a diamond-sharp, multiply-revised presentation of my Best Thoughts Ever?

And a blog post or email newsletter is not a lengthy, many-drafted essay. In fact, the best content is:

Brief,

Personal, and

Useful

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ON THE OTHER HAND

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“…she had warts.”

A local Portland station urges neighbors to check in on one another. A photo shows a group of men standing in the street, spaced well apart, but talking about how they are doing in isolation and making plans to monitor how the neighborhood is managing.

I won’t pretend this is a silver lining here, but a few realities are being faced and some things are getting done. Continue reading